Personal statement should have values like community, practicality, accountability, personal development, and religion.

I come from a background where contribution to the community and strong brotherhood is important. When I came from Pakistan (South Asia) to the U.S 3 years ago, I had language barriers, religious differences because I’m a Muslim which held me back from having lots of friends or good academic performance or even understanding of the system, but every year I have improved upon my weaknesses and kept moving forward.

Maybe discuss strong cultural values of south Asians, challenges after migration to U.S and personal development and belief in faith and a better understanding of the system in U.S? I have also improved my English tremendously too.

If there are any better alternatives, I would be happy to know about that too.